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“Dyke,” “ Freak,” “ Fag,”
As always the insults seemed to follow Elliot as she walk down the corridor to the class room. She rolled her eyes, she'd always found it highly amusing that the idiots at her school think the the worst kind of insults they can throw at her are ones that acknowledge her sexual orientation !
“ Hey freak,” a tall girl with a horrid shade of red hair was leaning against the door frame of the class.
“ Ah, Dawn. I see you still insist on referring to me as 'freak', I really hoped you'd have thought of something more creative by know,” before Dawn could reply she had turned to the girl that stood besides her. “And Sophia,” Elliot looked her up and down and raised one eyebrow. “ You had a good weekend I see? How many boys this time, eh?”
Sophia was fussing over her short black hair, thinking about how to reply, before raising her hand and giving the middle finger “ Piss off, Elliot,”
“Well, I think I hit a nerve there didn't I, I always feel very privileged when you use my name,” she gave them a quick smile before sliding past them to take her usual seat at the front of the class.

None of this was new to Elliot, she had always been the 'weirdo that liked girls', but apart from that she was a genius. She could see through anyone in seconds, being a loner and avoiding distractions had paid off. She knew that Sophia had been to a party on the weekend and had snogged or even slept with at least 3 guys, from the faint smell of sweat,cheap perfume and men's deodorant that was still lingering.
Throughout the course of the lesson she heard the terms ' freak and lesbo' thrown around a few times, yet she took no notice.
As the buzzer went for the end of school, she stuffed a battered, black book into her bag contains plans of murders she was going to write, and left the class without being noticed.
She was heading towards the back of the school, somewhere that she could relax and think. She had plucked a long slim cigarette from the sliver packet, placed it between her small lips and slowly raised the lighter, before leaning back against the wall.
“ Hey freak, smoking kills you know!” Sophia had rounded the corner, followed by Dawn and Adele.
“ So, it does Sophia, but you know what else kills? Sexual diseases!” Elliot gave her a little wink before taking a drag from the cigarette. Sophia's eyes where full of rage as she slowly stalked forward.
“ Say. That. Again.” She threatened, inches from Elliot.
Exhaling the smoke into her face, Elliot replied “ I said, sexual diseases kill. Oh and so does second hand smoke,” before any of the girls had time to react, Elliot had slipped past them and was walking briskly in the opposite direction. “ Catch you later girls!”

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